Is punishment necessary to help children learn the difference between right and wrong?

今天写了一篇新的雅思英语作文，出自IELS 10 Test 1的一篇英语作文，作文有一部分源于本人的真实感受，欢迎大家批评指正。

To tell you the truth, I strongly supportthe view that punishment is dispensable for helping children to distinguishwhat is right and what is wrong, but the only thing that I have to emphasis isthat modest punishment is allowed, because too much punishment can makechildren distorted throughout their childhood.

       To some extent, compared with my sister,I was the lucky one who seldom suffered punishment in the childhood, morefortunately, they rarely used violence to correct my mistakes, from this point,it seems that my sister was not lucky in her childhood. Maybe I was a boy, shewas a girl, my family might prefer boys than girls. But I would feel sad Ifthey used violence and shout at me, it was unbearable because I was only achild and inexperienced, I would burst into tears and even be aggressive. As Imentioned before, such occasions happened less to me, but I could feel that violence,not punishment，would ruina kid’s heart. So proper punishments are needed. I have corrected many mistakesthrough various kinds of punishments, because I believed that they loved me andI wanted to be better of myself.

       In my personal opinion, parents andteachers should let children know the mistakes the make from the bottom theheart, the objective of punishment is to make children remember that themistakes is wrong and we should not make the same mistakes again. In reality,some inexperienced parents and teachers go to extremes, they think all thingscan be solved by extreme punishments, violence. That’s too bad, actuallyspeaking, I was the victim, when I was in my secondary school, too muchpunishments bring me giant pain of my body, which let me rethink whether It waseducation, Whether he was my beloved teacher, he used absolute violence toconquer my heart, I was feared of him and sometimes I couldn’t devote myselfinto studying, my heart was filled with sorrow since that time. However, weneed to set necessary guidance through punishments, such as tidy the room ifchildren make the room dirty, throw the rubbish into the dustbin and so on.Giving more encouragement and guidance can correct their timeline of growingup, and can achieve significant results.

       Punishments, not violence, are reallynecessary for children, what’s more, give more education and encouragement canbe extremely important, when children grow up, they will thank you for yoursuitable methods of punishments and education. That’s the truth, please believeit.