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；亮点： With the pace of live speeding up.
in the meantime
the determinant factor of achievement is one’s effort rather the number of things he is doing.
the people who owns
spoiling
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In contemporary society, it is an indisputable truth that the pace of both work and life are increasingly accelerating. In this regard, the efficiency of work has been put so much significance to fit the demand of social pace. That may lead some impressional person to draw a conclusion that modern people are trapped with so many stuffs that they can not do something well, and the days when an individual devotes to one thing and complete it by endavoring all the energy has long gone. However, this opinion suffers from both logical and practical fallacies. Considering the following arguments, I, personally am in favor of that people in modern society can also do plenty things well.

Admittedly, social progression put undoubtely a much higher demand on the amount of our work, but we should not neglect the effects brought by the technology advancement. Taking my brother, a typical student, as an example. When he was in the university, there are not so many compters in my school, and we need to finish his assignments by arranging the dormitory one week ago, and he often stayed there for a whole day. However, now I am pursuing my master degree, and all of my co-workers have their own servers, and could rapidly complete the experiments by simulation. We have much more time for relax even though there are much more invesitigations and paperwork to be coped with.

Also, there are more development on the demand of working quality. The modern market economy stimulate the race between corporations, and we can only survive if we finish the assignments effectively, and of more significance, nicely. According to a surey conducted by Renmin Net, one of the most authorized media in China, 79 percente of the responds, the holders of companies, imply that the only way to make their business successful is to provide products that meet the expectation of consumers.

Last but not least, goverments and schools attach more and more importance on cultivating the responsibility of young children. When I was really young, I was told I could be late for a while, the efficiency of work would not be the excuse for me to do my assignments badly. The young generation also be told when they are attending primary school. Therefore, when they grow up, it is more likely for them to do their work very well.

In a nutshell, people in modern society are more effective and responsible for their work. Anyway, there are a thousand Hamlet in one thousand people’s eyes, I hope the individuals holding the opponent ideas might somehow compromise after exposed to this article.