2019.1.12 toefl independent writing

Admittedly, travel benefits both young and old, as it is a great way to break monotony of daily activities. Travelling to a foreign country helps people discover more about themselves as they meet new friends and see things from different perspective. However, I still hold that travel to different country when we are young is better.

 

Firstly, young people are more energetic to search and enjoy the adventure. For old, it is almost impossible for them to climb a really stiff mountain, as they already have trouble to walk for a long time. While the young may just find it is really an excitement to try to challenge themselves to climb such a mountain when they find one in a different country. Namely, they can enjoy more when they go to a different place.

 

Secondly, the young benefit themselves from travelling to a foreign country than their counterpart. Young people often have the ambition to create a new business or do some extraordinarily excellent things. And travel is really a good opportunity to equip them to do so. As they inspire themselves by the experience that they never had before. For example, when a chef goes to a new country, he may find a new way to prepare his own food, so when he comes back, he would refine his cooking skill which may lead to further development of his career.

 

Thirdly, it's much better for the old to have a rest in a peaceful place when they have already experienced the ups and downs as they had competed with others in different area and different countries. If they have traveled to different country when they are young, they probably have already found the best work they suit themselves and at the same the lifestyles they like and cities they love to live in. So, it is really a wonderful thing to just bonus themselves to live in that unique cities, have a peaceful life and talk to his families and friends all the time, as they may already find they have already felt exhausted to do such things with the fact that their health condition is worse and worse day by day.

 

In conclusion, it is more much better to travel to foreign countries when we are young.

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revise

As the saying goes: the world a book; those who do not travel reads only a page. Travel benefits both young and old, as it is a great way to break monotony of ordinary life. However, when it comes to the question of when is a better time to travel around the globe, some believe that it is better to travel when they are young while others claim that it is more beneficial to them when they are younger. I, personally, believe that it is far better to travel aboard when people are young.

 

Firstly, young people have less responsibilities so they are more likely to enjoy the exciting and relaxing trip to a foreign country. To be more specific, one has more commitments when getting old, like families and jobs. When people have more responsibilities to worry about, they will probably never make travelling an enjoyable experience. From example, being on a trip with all the bugs unfixed in the computer and terrible upcoming housing fees waiting to be paid may dilute the happiness which ought to have from viewing the wonderful scenery in another country. On the contrary, carefree young people would never care about such things like family, relations, business and so on, which means they can focus on the trip easily and thus enjoy it more than ever.

 

Secondly, young people are believed to be more adaptive than elders and young people can reap greater benefit of traveling aboard. When people get older, they are getting very comfortable with their own cultures and customs and they might find it very hard to fit in with the local culture when traveling internationally. However, when traveling at a much younger age, one will find the same culture elements thrilling and be eager to open up their minds and explore beliefs. In turn, these distinctive perspectives and different views would inspire the young to come up with even more novel and creative ideas which may later be proved to be the start of their careers in the following years.

 

Thirdly, health condition problems may impede and retreat the old from explore the new land. Namely, old people generally don’t have the perfect health condition to suffer the jet lag, layover, long flight hours and constant exchanging of different transports. To make things worse, traveling aboard can even be impossible for those who suffer from elderly diseases, like diabetes, Parkinson and cardiovascular problems.

 

In conclusion, it is much better to travel aboard when young since one has less responsibilities, is more adaptive and healthier.