2018.6.30 toefl independent writing

Just so-so often be the result when young kids are encouraged to have some ambition dreams, because many people finally find themselves hard to follow their dreams when they get older. While realistic goals favor progress in a specific area.

 

First, it is better for young kids to have realistic goals when they are young, who may not have a clear idea on what they want to do in the future. The main reason why someone could finally follow and accomplish their young-age-dreams, while others fail is that some of them really know what they want to be, while others don't. This is also why some college students to change their major in university. It is really hard for some young people to know which area is most suitable for them when they have already showed talented performance in some diverse areas or they haven’t found any work that they enjoy. Because of this, many young people just find their favorite job is very different from their early dream. So, the ambition dreams have nothing to do with their later achievement, even worse, some kids just keep follow some career which they are not good at or reluctant to do anything, even they are talented at, because the constantly sorrow experience related with fail to realize the dreams. On the other hand, young people can benefit from their realistic goals which can generate an idea on whether they are talented in some areas. Take Albert Einstein for example, he recognized his genius talent in math and physics after achieving some realistic goals to teach himself something like algebra and Euclidean geometry when he was a teenager.

 

Secondly, realistic works generate confident which can lead to better result. Discourage and frustrate, the young may experience, when they try again and again and still fail to fulfill their ambition blueprint. For example, last semester, I became fascinated with computer codes which made me want to create a very complex and ingenious app myself. However, owing to the fact I knew little about coding and software engineer, I finally failed to realize the ambition dream that I could finish my app in less than one week. The fact is even though I had asked many professional software developers and watched hundreds of videos on how to efficient coding, I still failed to write to app which could run normally with so many functions. Additionally, I also missed some important courses because of overworking, which made me even more frustrate and sad. And finally, I had to went to some doctors for help. Until then, did I realize how important and wise to make a realistic goal for myself. After I made a realistic goal to write a very interested but easy app with some of my best friends who were good at coding. Surprisingly, I learnt new knowledge progressively and we realized the goal in less than 3 days.

 

In conclusion, those who have ambition dreams may finally fail to realize it, which can make them frustrated and disappointed, while appropriate realistic goals may create continually progress.

 

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First, it is better for young kids to have realistic goals when they are young, who may not have a clear idea on what they want to do in the future. The main reason why someone could finally follow and accomplish their young-age-dreams, while others fail is that some of them really know what they want to be, while others don't. This is also why some college students to change their major in university. It is really hard for some young people to know which area is most suitable for them when they have already showed talented performance in some diverse areas or they haven’t found any work that they enjoy. Because of this, many young people just find their favorite job is very different from their early dream. So, the ambition dreams have nothing to do with their later achievement, even worse, some kids just keep following some career which they are not good at or reluctant to do anything, even they are talented at, because the constantly sorrow experience related with fail to realize the dreams. On the other hand, young people can benefit from their realistic goals which can generate an idea on whether they are talented in some areas. Take Albert Einstein for example, he recognized his genius talent in math and physics after achieving some realistic goals to teach himself something like algebra and Euclidean geometry when he was a teenager.

 

Secondly, realistic works build confidence which can lead to better result. Discourage and frustrate, the young may experience, when they try again and again and still fail to fulfill their ambition blueprint. For example, last semester, I became fascinated with computer coding. I wanted to create a very complex and ingenious app myself. However, it’s a matter of fact that I knew little about coding and software engineer. I finally failed to realize the ambition dream that I could finish my app in less than one week. The fact is even though I had asked many professional software developers and watched hundreds of videos on how to efficient coding, I still failed to write to app which could run normally with so many functions. Additionally, I also missed some important courses because of overworking, which made me even more frustrate and sad. And finally, I had to went to some doctors for help. Until then, did I realize how important and wise to make a realistic goal for myself. After I made a realistic goal to write a very interested but easy app with some of my best friends who were good at coding. Surprisingly, I learnt new knowledge progressively and we realized the goal in less than 3 days.

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