20180618-Task2-Environment-Reprot

Environment

In many countries, there is not enough recycling of waste materials.What are the reasons and solutions?

In the recent years, many countries emphasize the importance of recycling rubbish in order to tackle with the environmental crisis. However, the implementation process is not optimistic. There are two major reasons behind this trend;meanwhile, there are also two effectual approaches to mitigate the issue.

To start with, there are two main reasons to illustrate why the recycling of waste materials is inefficient and inadequate. For one thing, the government places the emphasis on advertising the importance of the environmental protection while neglecting some details on how to achieve it. Even if people raise their environmental awareness, they still lack the recognition of recycling rubbish; therefore, it is onerous for them to distinguish which types of materials are recyclable and which ones are not. As a result, most of the used materials are not recycled. For another thing, the characteristics of recyclable objects are too complex to recognize. In particular, in the same region, reusable matters are different in their sizes and colours, which confounds people, so the recycling process is likely to be ineffectual. [INSERT CLINCHING SENTENCE] {The clinching sentence restates the main idea of your paragraph.} {e.g. These are the two predominant factors that lead to this repercussion.}

TIP/S: It is important to note that, although the clincher sentence is the last statement of a paragraph, it should not bring attention to the fact that the essay is at an end by directly stating so. This is because the conclusion of the essay will usually have to maintain a tone of credibility, which can be damaged by an unprofessional clincher.
POINTER/S: Study more on the grammatical forms of words depending on their functions in the sentence.

To alleviate such quagmire, the possible solutions are always taken into consideration by both the individuals and the government. In the first place, the government should pay more attention to some details. They can launch a campaign to educate people of all ages about how to segregate the biodegradable waste from non-biodegradable ones. In addition, the recycled devices should be unified in order to simplify the process of recycling. The manufacturers should also mark the recyclable sign on products, which can help consumers easily and efficaciously differentiate those items. In the second place, people should increase their sense of responsibility and pay more patience to the recycling process. [INSERT EXAMPLE OR ILLUSTRATION] [INSERT CLINCHING SENTENCE]

To sum up, recycling garbage is a long-term method to make our planet a more salubrious place, so even if this process may meet some challenges, both the government and the public should endeavor to insist. [INSERT SYNTHESIS] {The best conclusion will include a synthesis, not just a summary—instead of a mere list of your major points, the best conclusion will draw those points together and relate them to one another so that your reader can apply the information given in the essay.} [INSERT CONTEXT] {One of the most important functions of the conclusion is to provide context for your argument. You may explain why this topic is timely or important or remind the readers of why the topic matters to them personally.}

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GLOSSARY:
1.mitigate - To mitigate something means to make it less unpleasant, serious, or painful.
2.onerous - If you describe a task as onerous, you dislike having to do it because you find it difficult or unpleasant.
3.confound - If someone or something confounds you, they make you feel surprised or confused, often by showing you that your opinions or expectations of them were wrong.
4.segregate - To segregate two groups of people or things means to keep them physically apart from each other.
5.salubrious - A place that is salubrious is pleasant and healthy.

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RATER’S COMMENTS:

STRONG POINTS:
1. The general statement in the introductory paragraph is captivating.
2. The pieces of information about the public and the government are germane to the given topic.
3. The relative clauses are helpful in expanding and elaborating sentences.
e.g. Furthermore, [The] manufacturers should [also] mark the recyclable sign on products, which can help consumers [easily and efficaciously] improve their recognition [differentiate those items]. [RELATIVE CLAUSE]

WEAK POINTS:
1. Each body paragraph lacks a clinching sentence.
2. There is a tendency to overuse transitions; however, there are also some missing transitions.
3. There are noticeable incorrect word forms.
e.g. [To start with][,] There [there] are two main reasons to illustrate why the recycling of waste materials is inefficiency [inefficient] [and inadequate]. [INCORRECT CAPITALISATION]