Task2参考范文——团队活动vs.个人活动

​​Task2: Group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are done alone. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
题目解析:是否赞同题——团队活动比个人活动可以教更多生活技能?

这篇是杜仕明老师的范文,他并没有模棱两可,而是给出了清晰的个人观点——同意,而且同意程度是:completely。杜杜的文章不用说啦,我们解析完抄起脑子开始背吧哈哈。

It is believed that people participating in team activities can acquire more life skills than those who enjoy doing things alone. Personally, I completely agree with this opinion.
首段先呼应+回答题目:
换词呼应:acquire; those who enjoy doing

It is apparent that getting involved in group activities allows people to be good at communicating with others. This is because in such activities, everyone needs to listen to and respond to each other’s opinions. How can people learn getting along with others if they do not try to win a football game together? Many children form strong and personal relationships with the friends they play with, and without the opportunity to do this, they could grow up emotionally immature or unformed.
本段结构:观点句+解释句+两个例子
我们在写完观点句后可以问自己一句:为什么?你怎么想的,就用一句话来总结形成自己的解释句;
杜杜举了两个例子,第一个“略”,用反问句表达;第二个“详”,先写了事实,再分析了好处(反向分析without…)。
表达精华:
getting…:动名词作主语的长句,allows用的极好;
they could grow up emotionally immature or unformed:could虚拟语气,心智不成熟或不健全。

People also develop decision making and critical thinking skills while playing a part in team activities. For example, in the case of group discussion in high school lectures, students learn how to make their voice heard and they also learn how to accept the correct suggestions, probably sounding harsh, from others. In solo activities, however, there is no need to communicate and so we do not learn these skills.
本段结构:观点句+例子+踩不赞同观点
观点句(第二个观点)用also与上文进行了连接
表达精华:
while doing…:极好地连接“做+作用”;
in the case of:很好的引出例子的连接词;
用solo activities替换activities that are done alone;
however用在中间很地道啊。

It is true that people foster the ability to behave and think independently via reading or traveling alone, but such qualities can also be easily achieved through team activities where each member is required to contribute their own thoughts and efforts. Therefore, I would argue that the skills gained through solo activities or games can also be fostered by people doing things together.
本段结构:“让步式”踩不赞同观点+Therefore 我赞同…
先承认个人活动的好处,再说这些好处集体活动也能easily achieved,从而反向论证了自己的观点。
表达精华:
感觉全都是啊啊!

In conclusion, both team and individual activities are helpful for people to develop useful life skills, but I strongly believe that the former can produce better results.
本段结构:“让步式”——两种活动都有好处(上文提过个人活动的好处,所以这里如是说并不唐突)+个人观点再次表明
表达精华:学会用 the former 和 the latter表达吧。

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