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The table gives the volumes of waste produced by different countries over 2 decades from 1980 to 2000.	The chart shows the amount of waste created by six countries in three seperate years.	这个图是三个年代的separate对比，用from to 带有连续的性质，不是很好，不推荐。different countries可以说的具体一点，six countries比较好。volume 表示抽象体积和量，这边最好用amount。
The US was by far the country which produced the largest amount of waste,and the amount was in a continueous rise from 2003 million tonnes in 1980 to 4005 in 2000.	The US was by far produced the largest amount of waste among these six countries,with the amount in a nearly two-fold increase from 2003 million tonnes in 1980 to 4005 in 2000.	粗体注意可以加个限定词，然后这个来说的话他这么形容会更好一点
The volumes produced by japan was much lower:it was raising at a steady pace from 44 million tones in 1980 to 52 million tones in 2000.	The figure for japan was much lower :there was a steady rise to 52 million tonnes.	前面有了from to，后面在写这个就显得很冗余。可以换一种表达方式，增长到… 然后 日本的数字不用写日本的产量了，直接写the figure for japan更简洁。
By comparision,there are a dramatic fall in the korea.It recorded a sharp fall from 31 in 1980 to 19 in 2000.	Although no figure was given for Korea in 1980, the amount of waste produced by this country was huge (31 and 19 million tonnes).	明显想不出表述了啊,这么表述真的非常冗余。而且，韩国也不是dramatic fall。总之，这一段写的不好。
By comparision	The amounts of waste produced by other countries were much lower.	这里逻辑出现了一个误区：要找五五开的，这边按升降比例不是五五开，最好找总量大小。
想说他增长趋势的	The figure for Ireland was the lowest, and there was no information for the year 1990.	数字相对来说太小就不要说趋势了。
要跟我写的差不多。	Poland **saw a slight increase **from 2 million in 1980 to 5 million in 2000.	说到最后可以不用说tonnes！
The figure for Portugal remained basically unchanged between 9.7 and 10.1 million tonnes for two decades from 1980 to 1990.	The figure for Portugal remained basically unchanged, climbing to 10.1 million and then decreasing to 9.7 million.	我觉得我写的更好，但是看看后面这种简易表达方式。
Overall, the US created more waste than any other country. All countries created more waste during this period while Korea and Portugal saw different trends.	Overall, the US created more waste than any other country. All countries created more waste during this period while Korea and Portugal saw different trends.	没啥可以改的吧。

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The chart shows the amount of waste generated by six countries in three seperate years.
The US produced the largest amount of waste among these six countries,with the amount in a nearly two-fold increase from 2003 million tonnes in 1980 to 4005 in 2000.The figure for Japan was much lower :there was a rapid rise to 52 million tonnes.Although no figure was provided for Korea in 1980, the amount of waste produced by this country was huge (31 and 19 million tonnes).
The amounts of waste produced by other countries were much lower.The figure for Ireland was the lowest, and there was no information for the 1990.Poland saw a moderate increase from 2 million in 1980 to 5 million in 2000.The figure for Portugal remained basically unchanged, climbing to 10.1 million and then decreasing to 9.7 million.
Overall, the US created more waste than any other country. All countries created more waste during this period while Korea and Portugal saw different trends.

emmmm…我觉得我写的挺好的怎么回事…