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这篇雅思小作文题目摘自《剑桥雅思12》Test5。

可以停在这里想一想解题的思路

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the gender rates of different age citizens who doing excises regularly in Australia during 2010.

In general, the graphic shows majority of Australian women prefer working out than men in age 25 or older. And it shows that most male really into excise when they are aged 15 to 24 and the rates of female reach a peak when they are 45 to 54.

The most significant difference of percentage of men and women about that could be seen in 35- to 44-year-old people, witch accounts for 39.5% and 52.5% respectively. In contract, while those sports lovers’ age is 65 or over, the gender difference would not be so considerable. It is also mentionable that only in the age group of 15 to 24 the percentage of male is more than female, with 52.8% and 47.7% respectively. Besides, while the percentage of male who aged 35 to 44 and usually did sports is lower than 40%, remained groups’ dates of that are all exceed 50%.

雅思小作文最重要的就是逻辑清晰，考察的是我们对于数据图标的总结与对比。准备雅思小作文的时候我们除了需要背诵一些基本的句型来罗列数据或进行比较之外，还应该多看题来锻炼自己的数据整合的能力。以下是我对于这篇小作文的一些修改建议。(点开图片横置观看效果更佳)

如果在动笔之前能够花一两分钟简单地总结一下图表的规律并且列出一个小题纲的话，写作时就会更有方向感，而不是杂乱无章，看到什么写什么。下面是这个题目的范文，可以看到，不需要华丽的词藻或者复杂的句式，我们同样可以清楚地表达出我们的意思并拿到高分。(被highlight的词或短语最好可以熟记，从而在未来的题目中使用。)

The chart compares the proportions of Australian males and females in six age categories who were physically active on a regular basis in the year 2010.

Roughly speaking, close to half of Australian adults did some kind of routine physical activity in 2010. Middle aged females were the most physically active, proportionally, while males aged 35 to 44 did the least physical activity.

In the youngest age category (15 to 24), almost 53% of Australian men but only 47.7% of women did regular physical activity in 2010. However, between the ages of 25 and 44, men were much less active on average than women. In fact, in the 35 to 44 age group, a mere 39.5% of males did some form of regular exercise, compared to 52.5% of females.

Between the ages of 45 and 64, the figure for male physical activity rose to around 45%, while the proportion of active females remained around 8% higher, at 53%. Finally, the percentages of Australian women and men aged 65 and over who exercised regularly were almost identical, at approximately 47%.

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