托福作文120-23

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Discussion is a basic element of students' class experience.

Student discussion is an essential element of the class experience.

This idea is well accepted.

This idea is nothing new.

In fact, the importance of class discussion has been widely recognized by schools and academic institutions in North America.

In fact, the significance of discussion is widely held across schools and academic institutions across North America.

Recently, many experts in China want to incorporate the concept of class discussion to the architecture of public schools where this concept is serious inadequate.

注意aim to 表示想

Recently, many experts in China aim to adopt the concept of class discussion in its public-school system where it is seriously lacking.

Not everyone, however, holds that this is valuable to students.

注意这里用believe 表示想法

Not everyone, however, believes them to be valuable towards students’ learning process.

Many people think that the discussion in class is unnecessary and wastes of time.

用sustain 表观点

Many people still sustain that classroom discussions are unnecessary and a waste of time.

From my opinion of view, discussion is really a valuable learning tool.

From my perspective, class discussions are indeed useful and a valuable learning tool.

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用there be 替换，动名词做主语

Many people believe it is unnecessary to leave students time for discussion.

There are many who think it is unnecessary to give time to discussion in class.

In … opinion 替换 from … perspective

From their perspective, the class discussions would easily become chaotic when 50 students or more involve in these discussions, as it is hard for teachers to manage every student well.

the discussions that takes place in a classroom 替换class discussion

would be able to 替换 can; properly 替换well

In their opinion, the discussions that takes place in a classroom with 50 or more students can easily turn chaotic, because teachers would not be able to properly manage every student.

While diligent students may put forward their own ideas, others probably digress and do something unrelated to the study.

注意表达观点的说法voice … opinion

这里用there be 增加句式; may 替换would

While the more studious students would voice their opinions about the subject matter at hand, there would be others who may derail the discussion to something completely unrelated.

These unnecessary interruptions would impair the overall efficiency of the class discussion, not to say to use the class time effectively.

Unnecessary, unwarranted

导致cause

Unproductive 低效

These unwarranted interruptions may compromise the efficiency of the classroom discussion as a whole and cause it to be an unproductive use of valuable class time.

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Most of the teachers, however, can sustain an order class and easily prevent these things from happening.

注意表示大多数

Be able to 替换can

两个短句换主语

The majority of teachers, however, are able to maintain order and these chaotic scenarios can be easily prevented.

Even in a class constituted of lots of students, teachers can divide them into small group where a group leader is allocated to organize the discussions and consolidate the main point.

注意with的用法

People 替换students

一句话拆成两句话

Even in a class with a large number of people, teachers can divide students into smaller groups and assign each group with a student leader whose duty would be to organize the discussion and consolidate the main ideas.

In an arrangement like this, teachers only need to collect the feedbacks from the group leaders and give suggestions to the groups when they encounter any problems in the discussions. 

提供建议provide advice

出现问题 run into any problems

Under this arrangement, the teacher will simply have to collect feedback from each group leaders and provide advice if the group run into any problems during their discussions.

In this case, students in the groups can stay focused and the goal of classroom discussions can be realized.

注意链接词 as a result

目标 objective

实现achieve

The groups stay focused at a result and the objectives of classroom discussion are achieved.

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More importantly, discussions in classrooms are beneficial for students' academic performance.

更重要more than anything else

起好作用have positive effects on

就是注意在一直用复数避免单复数问题的时候，在某些必需用单数的时候

More than anything else, letting students discuss in class has positive effects on their academic performance.

First, classroom discussions foster students to voice different viewpoints.

促进 help promote ; a variety of 替换different

First, classroom discussions help promote a variety of views from other students.

Researches have shown that, when faced with opposite perspectives, students can improve their critical thinking enormously which is an invaluable skill for their lives.

面对 confront with; 提升水平 increase the level of

注意表示基础重要的意思essential

这种作为整体的说法as a whole, in general

It has been proven that, when confronted with opposing perspectives, students can quickly increase their level of critical thinking. This is an essential skill for life in general.

Second, rather than listening constantly to a professor monotonously lecturing, participating in the discussions would spark interests of the students to an unfamiliar topic, which they may have no interested in.

Instead of替换

注意这种多说话的感觉drone on  

注意这个动词转名词的写法

Bring 产生作用，替换would

Assign安排

Engage 替换interest

注意两个并列小短句的写法brings and helps

Second, instead of simply listening to a professor drone on with his monotonous lectures, student participation brings additional interests to the topic and helps engage students who may before did not find the topic to be interesting.

用at times 字多

Sometime, one student questions may inspire others who would contemplate the deeper relationship of various parts of the teaching materials.

激发兴趣pique … interest

伴随trigger 补充

再加动词 小短句补充

At times, the right question asked by a certain student may very well pique another student’s interest, triggering him to think deeper and connect with the content.

Last, independent thinking can also be encouraged when doing discussions in class.

Last, class discussions also encourage students to think independently.

… matters 替换significant

注意表达这个单词express

Idea 替换point of view 

Students may during discussions, begin to aware of significance of expressing their own ideas.

They begin to realize that expressing their own point of view matters.

At the same time, they would aware how to illustrate their methods to find the solutions and made it validate to others.

Present替换express

Prove validity 可靠谱

Elaborate on thought process 详述思考过程

And will presenting, they will also realize that they will need to elaborate on their thought process and prove its validity.

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In summation, students benefit from class discussion in a variety of aspects.

In conclusion, students benefit from class discussion in many ways.

A more engaging and inspiration learning experience can be achieved by students when participating in discussions, which are able to not only increase the level of independent thinking but help students understand the benefits of appealing focused audiences.

stimulate, promote

获得gain from

注意理解的意思appreciate

注意吸引 capture

Students can hope to gain from class discussions a more engaging and stimulating learning experience. Class discussions can increase their level of independent thinking and help them appreciate the benefits of capturing attentive and respectful audiences.

Conduct, carry out

Concentrate their effort on, devote themselves to