2018.9.15 toefl independent writing

Some people like to spare the money for future use such as tuition and housing fees, while others would like to spend some money on travelling and vacations to enrich their lives. In my opinion, spend money on traveling is better.

 

Firstly, travel provides people a period of time that is available for ease, relaxation and the pursuit of recreational activities. Some people would argue that they would relax just by walk out from a while every day, However, travelling to a totally different place really offers people the opportunity to thoroughly relieving stress. A quiet, cozy night accompanied with local music and delicate foods would let people forget about the hustle and bustle city life, which means the traveler would immerse themselves in a wonderful relaxation experience which cannot be achieved by simply walk in the city street with the traffic noisy from time to time.

 

Secondly, intense work and study life constantly make the family reunion time is pretty limited. However, travelling severs as an incomparable opportunity for a family to go and enjoy days together. Divorce and single-parent families becoming more common as a result of lack communicate which can strengthen family ties. A happy family travelling can just hold the family together without the distraction from the works or other trivial matters.  So, more times than ever can spend with family member than the working days when people just have the breakfast with family and immediately go to work in a hurry before they can play with the kids for a while.

 

Thirdly, travel play an important role for people to come up with new ideas and learn new things despite so e expense needed to pay. Take Charles Darwin for example, had he refused voyage on HMS Beagle because of the high self-funded fees, never would he become an eminent geologist whose observations and theories make a huge impact on the science of evolution. It is just the trip or we say the travel that broaden his horizon which is the fundamental cause of his conception of the unprecedented theory, nature selection.

 

In conclusion, the cost of the travel is worthwhile as the travel can ease ourselves, have firmer relationship with family and make contribute to the success of our career.

 

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Some people like to spare the money for future use such as tuition and housing fees, while others would like to spend some money on travelling and vacations to enrich their lives. In my opinion, spend money on traveling is better.

 

Firstly, travel provides people a period of time for ease, relaxation and the pursuit of recreational activities. Some people would argue that they could relax just by walking every day, However, travelling to a totally different place really offers people the opportunity to thoroughly relieve stress. A quiet, cozy night accompanied with local music and delicate foods would let people forget about the hustle and bustle city life, which means the traveler would immerse themselves in a wonderful relaxation experience which cannot be achieved by simply walking in the city street with the traffic noisy from time to time.

 

Secondly, intense work and study life constantly make the family reunion time pretty limited. However, travelling serves as an incomparable opportunity for a family to go and enjoy days together. Divorce and single-parent families become more common as a result of lack communicate which can strengthen family ties. A happy family travelling can just hold the family together without the distraction from the works or other trivial matters.  So, more times than ever can spend with family member than the working days when people just have the breakfast with family and immediately go to work in a hurry before they can play with the kids for a while.

 

Thirdly, travel play an important role for people to come up with new ideas and learn new things despite so e expense needed to pay. Take Charles Darwin for example, had he refused voyage on HMS Beagle because of the high self-funded fees, never would he become an eminent geologist whose observations and theories make a huge impact on the science of evolution. It is just the trip or we say the travel that broaden his horizon which is the fundamental cause of his conception of the unprecedented theory, nature selection.

 

In conclusion, the cost of the travel is worthwhile as the travel can ease ourselves, have firmer relationship with family and benefit our future career.