IELTS-writing exercise Argumentation_Text_12

法律和社会+如何扣题Ⅰ

Q: The society is based on rules and laws. The society would not function well if individuals were free to do whatever they want. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

介绍段

背景句

Laws refer to the rules imposed on human beings.

改写题目

Although laws play an important role in regulating our behaviour, I believe that strict laws can also restrict our freedom.

主体部分第一段

中心句（社会）

If no law regulated people’s behaviour, a country would be in chaos and the economy would collapse.

举例1

If people do not obey traffic regulations, traffic accidents will increase and traffic congestion will become a problem.

举例2

If people who sell fake products online are not punished, consumers will stop shopping on the Internet and a country will suffer economically.

主体部分第二段

中心句（个人：福利）

If people do not follow moral principles and conform to social norms, they will not be able to develop a respectful and trusting relationship.

解释

People are sometimes motivated by self-interest to do something that would be harmful to others.

举例1

If people betray the trust of friends, they will not work together and social cohesion will be under threat.

举例2

If people do not fulfill their promises, they will find it difficult to conduct business together, and arguments will reduce productivity.

主体部分第三段

中心句（个人：福利）

Nevertheless，laws sometimes inevitably restrain human’s freedom and even hamper/hinder/obstruct social progress.

举例1

For instance, if one country has many restrictions on the business world, the business acitivity will not thrive.

举例2

If high income eraners are subject to high income tax rates, they may lack motivation to make greater efforts to increase their income.

结果

The government can relax regulations to foster innovations, which can contribute to social progress.

结论段

再次表明立场

It is reasonable to conclude that the society cannot operate well without laws and rules.

总结观点

Even though the laws does not allow people to act at will, the main purpose is to create a society where people can live in harmony.

Model

Laws refer to the rules imposed on human beings. Although laws play an important role in regulating our behaviour, I believe that strict laws can also restrict our freedom.
If no law regulated people’s behaviour, a country would be in chaos and the economy would collapse. If people do not obey traffic regulations, traffic accidents will increase congestion will become a problem. If people who sell fake products online are not punished, consumers will stop shopping on the Internet and a country will suffer economically.
If people do not follow moral principles and conform to social norms, they will not be able to develop a respectful and trusting relationship. People are sometimes motivated by self-interest to do something that would be harmful to others. If people betray the trust of friends, they will not work together and social cohesion will be under threat. If people do not fulfill their promises, they will find it difficult to conduct business together, and arguments will reduce productivity.
Nevertheless，laws sometimes inevitably restrain human’s freedom and even hamper/hinder/obstruct social progress. For instance, if one country has many restrictions on the business world, the business acitivity will not thrive. If high income earners are subject to high income tax rates, they may lack motivation to make greater efforts to increase their income. The government can relax regulations to foster innovations, which can contribute to social progress.
It is reasonable to conclude that the society cannot operate well without laws and rules. Even though the laws does not allow people to act at will, the main purpose is to create a society where people can live in harmony.

学习点

扣题的要点

1. 每个主体段的中心句要出现题目的关键词，对应题目。
2. 举例时，尽量和题目的问题对应。
3. 在每个主体段的结尾，如果题目是两个对比的对象，可以用“对比”方式扣题。
4. 结尾段扣题。

Improved Model

Laws refer to the rules imposed on human beings. Although laws play an important role in regulating our behaviour, I believe that strict laws can also restrict our freedom.
If no law regulated people’s behaviour, a country would be in chaos and the economy would collapse. For example, If people do not obey traffic regulations, traffic accidents will increase congestion will become a problem. The revenue of numerous business will be affected because their products cannot be deliverd efficiently. Similarly, in a country where there are no laws to punish those merchantswho sell fake products online are not punished, consumers will stop shopping on the Internet and a country will suffer economically.
Following moral principles is also important; otherwise,people will not be able to develop a respectful and trusting relationship. They are sometimes motivated by self-interest to do something that would be harmful to others, such as betraying the trust of their business partners, but this would cause damage to their relationship. If people do not fulfill their promises, they will find it difficult to conduct business together, and arguments will reduce productivity. It is fair to say that no society could function well when people lack mutual trust.
On the other hand，laws sometimes inevitably restrain human’s freedom and even hamper/hinder/obstruct social progress. For instance, if one country has many restrictions on the business world, the business acitivity will not thrive. High income earners who are subject to high income tax rates may lack motivation to make greater efforts to increase their income. The government can relax regulations to unlock potential of these people, which can contribute to social progress.
From what has been discussed, it is reasonable to argue that the society cannot operate well without laws and rules. Alternatively, our society cannot advance easily, if laws are too restrictive.
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