IELTS-writing exercise Argumentation_Text_15

交税+如何写中心句

Q: Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay any tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

介绍段

背景句

Many people regard tax as a burden, because it can reduce their disposable income.

阐述立场

I think that we need to pay tax, because without tax revenue, the society cannot function appropriately.

主体部分第一段

中心句（经济资源）

If the government has tax revenue, public facilities such as roads, schools and hospitals can receive more funds from the state.

举例1

Without a great public transport system, commuters find it difficult to travel to and from work, and traffic congestion could reduce work efficiency.

举例2

Public schools can provide children with educational opportunities and enable these young students to gain knowledge, which is beneficial to economic growth.

对比

These projects or services are normally not funded by private sector, because of the low profit.

附加观点（个人福利）

We should also recongnise that the government can achieve the goal of income redistribution by taxation.

举例

For example, in many countries, the high income group needs to pay high tax, while the low income group can get assistance from the government.

主体部分第二段

中心句

Levying taxes can regulate people’s behaviour.

解释

People fail to show self-restraint sometimes and cannot change some bad habits.

举例

For example, the heavy tax on cigarette and alcohol discourages people from spending on these items.

结果

This change can improve the well-being of people and ease the pressure on the medical system.

主体部分第三段

中心句

People may not have the incentive to work hard and entrepreneurs are also not willing to set up a business.

解释

Money is a great motivator for most people because they can improve living standards and gain a sense of accomplishment.

举例

Without the hard work of these people and their willingness to show their talents, a country would not become prosperous and the welfare system could not be sustained.

结论段

再次表明立场

I am convinced that taxes are the lifeboold of the economy although high taxes can have an adverse effect on economic growth.

Model

Many people regard tax as a burden, because it can reduce their disposable income. I think that we need to pay tax, because without tax revenue, the society cannot function appropriately.
If the government has tax revenue, public facilities such as roads, schools and hospitals can receive more funds from the state. Without a great public transport system, commuters find it difficult to travel to and from work, and traffic congestion could reduce work efficiency. Public schools can provide children with educational opportunities and enable these young students to gain knowledge, which is beneficial to economic growth. These projects or services are normally not funded by private sector, because of the low profit. We should also recongnise that the government can achieve the goal of income redistribution by taxation. For example, in many countries, the high income group needs to pay high tax, while the low income group can get assistance from the government.
Levying taxes can regulate people’s behaviour. People fail to show self-restraint sometimes and cannot change some bad habits. For example, the heavy tax on cigarette and alcohol discourages people from spending on these items. This change can improve the well-being of people and ease the pressure on the medical system.
People may not have the incentive to work hard and entrepreneurs are also not willing to set up a business. Money is a great motivator for most people because they can improve living standards and gain a sense of accomplishment. Without the hard work of these people and their willingness to show their talents, a country would not become prosperous and the welfare system could not be sustained.
I am convinced that taxes are the lifeboold of the economy although high taxes can have an adverse effect on economic growth.

学习点

中心句，主体段每段话的第一句，即先总结，后解释。
在中心句中应该将整段话的主要观点说出来。
注意点

1. 要素一： 中心句一定要和段落的内容一致。
2. 要素二： 中心句要有连接词。
3. 要素三： 中心句要出现关键词或关键词的替换表达。
4. 要素四： 中心句要对应题目。

中心句要对应题目的类型，回答题目的问题。

Improved Model

Many people regard tax as a burden, because it can reduce their disposable income. I think that we need to pay tax, because without tax revenue, the society cannot function appropriately.
If the government has tax revenue, more funds can be used to build public facilities such as roads, schools and hospitals can receive more funds from the state. Without a great public transport system, commuters find it difficult to travel to and from work, and traffic congestion could reduce work efficiency. Public schools can provide children with educational opportunities, and without a well-educated workforce, a country cannot sustain economic growth. Private investors are normally not interested in transport links and schools, which do not generate considerable profits.
Levying taxes can regulate people’s behaviour and encourage them, especially those who sometimes fail to show self-restraint , to break bad habits. For example, the heavy tax on cigarette and alcohol discourages the public from spending on these items. The resulting lifestyle changes can improve their health and reduce hospital visits, thereby easing the pressure on the medical system.
On the other hand, if taxpayers are subject to high taxes, they may not have the incentive to work hard and entrepreneurs are also not willing to set up a business. Money is a great motivator for most people because with high income, they can improve living standards and gain a sense of accomplishment. Without the hard work of these people and their willingness to show their talents, a country would not become prosperous and the welfare system could not be sustained.
Overall, I am convinced that taxes are the lifeboold of the economy although high taxes can have an adverse effect on economic growth.
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